So I've written a new script!
My latest screenplay is a fast paced comedy with a working title; Amazing Fantasy.
I've finished a first draft and I am just working on the spelling and grammar now before sending it out to a few people/contests to see how it does. I did however want to share the opening five pages of it with you guys so that you can get a feel for my work and then hopefully tell me if you think it's any good or not! Constructive criticism would be greatly appreciated.
Here's the logline:
'A comic book geek and his girlfriend team up to steal a copy of Amazing Fantasy #15, the first appearance of Spider-Man, for his dying Grandfather.'
Now go ahead and read the opening! Please let me know what you think, whether that be through the comments section, my twitter or email.
Enjoy!
My latest screenplay is a fast paced comedy with a working title; Amazing Fantasy.
I've finished a first draft and I am just working on the spelling and grammar now before sending it out to a few people/contests to see how it does. I did however want to share the opening five pages of it with you guys so that you can get a feel for my work and then hopefully tell me if you think it's any good or not! Constructive criticism would be greatly appreciated.
Here's the logline:
'A comic book geek and his girlfriend team up to steal a copy of Amazing Fantasy #15, the first appearance of Spider-Man, for his dying Grandfather.'
Now go ahead and read the opening! Please let me know what you think, whether that be through the comments section, my twitter or email.
Enjoy!
What did you think, would you be interested in reading more? Let me know!
Thanks for reading!
Hey Alex, nice comic adaptation! :-) I do loads of them myself. My only piece of constructive criticism is that if you're going along an American storyline, I'd consider choosing different names for your opening characters as they sound too British and considering comic book are a more American cultured thing (especially Marvel) it would just seem more suited. Other than that, I'm loving it!! :-)
ReplyDeleteThank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it! I will take your feedback on board! Thanks for commenting!
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